Teeth

If I do not clean my teeth
my blood sucking fangs will disappear.

If I don't clean my teeth
my bite will not get any blood.

If I do not clean my teeth
My teeth are 40,000 years old.

If I don't clean my teeth
I will have to go to the dentist
and get them burnt by the dentist dragon.

By Izaac.

teeth by Makayla

If I don’t clean my teeth my teeth will go all rotten, stinky and yellow with plaque on them .All gūngy green and furry.
If I don’t clean my teeth will be all jagged, cracked and snapped.
My teeth are 60 years old they have been like that for the last 60 years .I have dot got a toothbrush.
When I got to the dentist I lay on the dentist chair, they start the drill and rip my teeth out .I have got false teeth now.

the beach by Brooklyn

The sand shines and sparkles
And nobody says no
To splashing in cool
Summer sea
The sun shines on the rock pools
People laying out their towels
People slopping sunblock on
Children building sandcastles
Sand sculptures of dolphins, dogs, birds and cats
The next day the sand lays flat
The waves bubbling as the tide rolls in
I love the beach.

teeth by Adrianna

If I don’t clean my teeth
They will become rotten and fall out.
My teeth will look dirty

If I don’t clean my teeth
They will break
Become jagged and sharp

If I don’t clean my teeth
They will not last
For very long

If I don’t clean my teeth
The dentist will pull my teeth out.

So I’m ALWAYS going to clean my TEETH!

Hamilton school trip

The zoo

gentlegiant - Zavier

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there live a kind Gentle Giant living on a rainbow ronudcloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of cute little friends.

The kind Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of little trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the big sandpit and make lots of big things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

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The Gentle Giant 2 - Charlie

Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant that had spikes
on its back and big musils fiat lick a mouton and he is tall as
the clouds. He has bits of hear on its head.living on acandy
cloud in a jungle vine candy funny castle houseHe was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle giant- Eden - part2

The Gentle Giant Long long ago there was a nice Gentle Giant living on a round round cloud in a palace that had lights all around it He was nice and he was very friendly and had lots of little Happy friends. His hair was very smooth. he was very hary. His nosie is sharp as a nive. The nice Gentle Giant had built a big huge sandpit and had lots of big trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his happy friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of nice things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line. when they were having a drink out side sand would get all in there drinks.The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with theGentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.The Gentle Giant Long long ago there was a nice Gentle Giant living on a round round cloud in a palace that had lights all around it He was nice and he was very friendly and had lots of little Happy friends. His hair was very smooth. he was very hary. His nosie is sharp as a nive. The nice Gentle Giant had built a big huge sandpit and had lots of big trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his happy friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of nice things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line. when they were having a drink out side sand would get all in there drinks.The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with theGentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle Giant - Dane - Part 2

The Gentle Giant Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant rainbowhair and a very tall giant in the word and blue eyes and brown sink sov sink ama green ama ranbow powers a blue T;scot and oldnt living on a cloud in a house. Nights guarding his house with 2 flags on top ov his house and live Made of metel bricks.cloud candyfloss with 4 seatblet it moves and 1.Cloud thatmoves side to the another side and its safe and its fun.it gos 10 seed flast the candyfloss it is strong its got 1000 shieds on top it. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the
Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle Giant - Tre - Part 3

The Gentle Giant Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant living on a nice warmworm white cloudander a house.it tase like cokey and crem ice crem and spakaels like the moon lhatein a house. He was nice and had lots of smarmt little friends. The Gentle Giant looks like a big hayoumen with nice shiney beran hiar.he has got a big green spakeley shot it is as green as the shiney geras.and he has shiney blue pans . The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.His house is a big castie with sun flawers curvy stiks and nice dafatels. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through themm when they were hanging on the washing line.The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with theGentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem becose he wanted to play with hes friendse .

getle gint - Tre Part 2

The Gentle Giant Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant living on a nice warmworm white cloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of smarmt little friends. The Gentle Giant looks like a big hayoumen with nice beran hiar.he has got a big green shot it is as green as the geras.and he has shiney pans The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.His house is a big castie with sun flawers curvy stiks and nice dafatels. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked itbetter outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

The Gentle Giant

Once there was a Gentle Giant living on a cloud in a huge caslleWith gradin dragons sounding it and grapvins grow on the wall’s .the way to get up and down was a slave dragon. Now the giant has dark green eyes old wings (septet to arm’s ) breaths fire and fireballs and rags for clothes. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

The Gentle Giant - Tumai

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant happy and he was kind and friendly and he had a house withliving on a cloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

The Gentle Giant amber

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there was a funnyGentle Giant living on a he looks like a with a hat cloud in a rambow house it was a carsel. He was nice and had lots of little friends whan her friends came to play thay had to jump on a big rambow cloud that had to go up to her house . The Gentle Giant had built a big sparlke sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers and some sparkle sand to play with,in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sparlke sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sparkle sparkle sand all over their rambow houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sparkle sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

The Gentle Giant

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there was a whiledGentle Gianthe has got glasses on his face. Dlack hier he is living on a cloud in a house. He was nice and whiled and hehad lots of little friends. Thewhiled Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle giant - Dane

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant rainbowhair and a very tall giant in the word and blue eyes and brown sink sov sink ama green ama ranbow powers a blue T;scot and oldliving on a cloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

The Gentle Giant - Tre

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant living on a nice warm white cloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of smart little friends. The Gentle Giant looks like a big hayoumen with nice beran hiar.he has got a big green shot it is as green as the geras.and he has shiney pans
The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle Giant 2 - charlie

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant that had spiks on it back and big musils fiat lick a mouton and he is tall as the clouds. He has bits of hear on its head.living on a cloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Charlie's The Gentle Giant

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant that had spikes on its back and big muscles that's like a mountain and he is tall as the clouds. He has bits of hair on his head. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Eden gentle giant part 1

The Gentle Giant









Once upon a time there was a nice Gentle Giant living on a round cloud in a palice house. He was nice, he was very frendly and had lots of little Happy friends. His hier was very smoth he was very heirey. His was gentley. His nosie is sharp as a nive. The nice Gentle Giant had built a big hoje sandpit and had lots of big trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his happy friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of nice things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it
better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.
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