gentlegiant - Zavier

The Gentle Giant
Once upon a time there live a kind Gentle Giant living on a rainbow ronudcloud in a house. He was nice and had lots of cute little friends.

The kind Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of little trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the big sandpit and make lots of big things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

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The Gentle Giant 2 - Charlie

Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant that had spikes
on its back and big musils fiat lick a mouton and he is tall as
the clouds. He has bits of hear on its head.living on acandy
cloud in a jungle vine candy funny castle houseHe was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.
The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle giant- Eden - part2

The Gentle Giant Long long ago there was a nice Gentle Giant living on a round round cloud in a palace that had lights all around it He was nice and he was very friendly and had lots of little Happy friends. His hair was very smooth. he was very hary. His nosie is sharp as a nive. The nice Gentle Giant had built a big huge sandpit and had lots of big trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his happy friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of nice things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line. when they were having a drink out side sand would get all in there drinks.The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with theGentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.The Gentle Giant Long long ago there was a nice Gentle Giant living on a round round cloud in a palace that had lights all around it He was nice and he was very friendly and had lots of little Happy friends. His hair was very smooth. he was very hary. His nosie is sharp as a nive. The nice Gentle Giant had built a big huge sandpit and had lots of big trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his happy friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of nice things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line. when they were having a drink out side sand would get all in there drinks.The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with theGentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle Giant - Dane - Part 2

The Gentle Giant Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant rainbowhair and a very tall giant in the word and blue eyes and brown sink sov sink ama green ama ranbow powers a blue T;scot and oldnt living on a cloud in a house. Nights guarding his house with 2 flags on top ov his house and live Made of metel bricks.cloud candyfloss with 4 seatblet it moves and 1.Cloud thatmoves side to the another side and its safe and its fun.it gos 10 seed flast the candyfloss it is strong its got 1000 shieds on top it. He was nice and had lots of little friends. The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through them when they were hanging on the washing line.
The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with the
Gentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem.

Gentle Giant - Tre - Part 3

The Gentle Giant Once upon a time there was a Gentle Giant living on a nice warmworm white cloudander a house.it tase like cokey and crem ice crem and spakaels like the moon lhatein a house. He was nice and had lots of smarmt little friends. The Gentle Giant looks like a big hayoumen with nice shiney beran hiar.he has got a big green spakeley shot it is as green as the shiney geras.and he has shiney blue pans . The Gentle Giant had built a big sandpit and had lots of trucks and diggers to play with, in it. When his friends came to play they would play in the sandpit and make lots of things.His house is a big castie with sun flawers curvy stiks and nice dafatels. The children’s parents liked the Gentle Giant but got angry when everyone played in the sandpit because it would rain sand all over their houses and gardens below. Mums got grumpy because their floors were always sandy and when it rained it would get messy. The people who liked gardening got mad because the leaves on the plants would break and they wouldn’t grow. The clothes always had sand through themm when they were hanging on the washing line.The Gentle Giant got sad because the children were told not to play in the sandpit when they went and played with theGentle Giant. He liked playing inside the house but he liked it better outside in the sunshine. He needed to work out how to fix the problem becose he wanted to play with hes friendse .